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I break these stanzas down like so because the first is the balanced side of the mystical and the second is the balanced side of science and chemistry, which are ...

Gammahydroxybutyrate is a date rape drug. I hope this translates some of the imagery for you, as it is more centered on the chemical reactions taking place in the body ...

I enjoyed this - and this is a fair piece of work, as long as you are aware that what you have written is nothing more than what it is ...

Hey nonny nonny yea, you're a beautiful writer. And uh.. Penny Lane? Big fan.

You overuse excess imagery, especially in the first stanza, and I don't think it helps the poem at all but just makes it thicker to wade through.

Double space the paragraphs.

THE SIXTH REIGN OF MYSTIC Empress The beer was warm. Aloisio wrinkled his nose and set the mug down on the counter. Two perfect eyes lay low, his head perfectly ...

Rambling sentance much? through the branches, [s]through the folds[/s], mother humming

I like smoke and mirros. Just don't use it again.

A nice breath of fresh air, well-appreciated. I comment only to reassure you of it's worth.

I agree with Brad on the ending thing, and the image of the text was a bit drawn out.

people should stop writing about him. his ego is big enough already.

Well, this isn't the best of poems but... I enjoyed it. =]

Nice ending. Simplistic, but beautiful. Here's another from that day; Awkward transition.

Prettier =]